Futher feedback

Cover-

• Try changing the width of the border/try it without 
• Get rid of the white border around the outside(just the image) what does that look like?
• Position the artist's name differently, see which is most attractive
• Make the artist's name more prominent, try different sizes

Contents-

• Try different fonts, see which is most suited
• Make the text smaller, all is too large
• Try adding some detail about each page to fill space if necessary
• Try putting the different pages into blocks, does this work?
• Could put text under different headers

Double page spread-

• Make drop cap fit into paragraph
• Make sure everything is exactly in line

Plan of action for 27/02

• Play around with double page spread to make second page more interesting, find best layout
• Check draft article, make any improvements and finalise
• Take new pictures, at least 40 with different shots and outfits. (To have majority taken)
• Decide on a style model magazine to link design ideas to for cover/contents/double page
• Make quote smaller/artist name bigger on title page and play around with how they fit on page
• Add article author/image credit
• Fit article to double page spread

Progressive changes that led to my finished draft magazine

During the making of my draft magazine I create multiple versions of my cover and double page spread. First I created the ones I had designed on my original flat plan and from there I adapted them until I had a design that I felt was suited to my genre, looked professional and I was happy with. The below designs are the ones that i started out with and the ones that i finished up with alongside my changed flat plans as a result of this development for my actual magazine cover page and double page spread.

This is the one I made originally from my flat plan, I did not like how the title overlapped the artist's face here and the bar code did fit well beside the masthead. Overall it looked unprofessional and unneat.

I developed the border around the image seen in my new flat plan here as I felt it displayed my masthead uniquely and attractively and separated the image as an important focal point away from everything else. However, I still did not like the quote as it overlapped the artist's top and did not stand out well.

This is the original double page spread I made from my flat plan and although I liked how the text was cut around my artist to fit on the page I felt it looked to plain and unprofessional. 

This is where I changed my design to include a whole image of the artist on one page and I preferred how this made my double page look. Also, I think the text together in one section looked more professional than the first where it was not in a set layout, however I then went onto input a picture to break up the large text area as it was too much. This can be seen on my new flat plan for my double page spread below.

Cover

Double page spread

My contents page worked successfully with only minor changes made from my original flat plan so this has stayed the same.

Audience feedback

1) The double page the bottom half of the image is quite dark so the artist's outfit is not clear against background. Also, the text on the front cover needs to contrast against photo so it stands out more and is easier to see. Could use a brighter photo.

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3) The title isn't very eye-catching as it blends into the border of the image. The font proportion between headers/sub-headers is good.

4) The artist should be styled to fit with the theme, clothes/make-up etc, consider mise en scene, Could use different outfits/shots on other pages to make each image unique and different. Also, the lighting on the pictures are very dark.

5) The layout of the columns on the double page spread are uneven and so do not look professional. Make them the same length and in the same position to improve neatness. Good use of colour to match the artist's clothes but could use similar colours used on contents/cover in new photos to link pages together. 

6) I like how the coloured rectangles are used on the contents page to break up the information but they need to be exactly the same size and aligned similar to the images. There isn't much information on the contents page about the magazine, add more pages.

Teacher feedback

Cover page-

• Artist needs to look at audience rather than looking to the side
• The information about the magazine e.g. price, issue and date needs to be smaller
• I need to move around the proportions of the magazine to make the text look realistic and more professional
• Barcode needs to be slightly bigger
• Make the artist's name a feature, bigger than quote

Contents page-

• Too much blank space
• Information about the magazine is too big
• Could use three images to make it look neat/more professional
• Title and page numbers are too big

Double page-

• Use the double page layout seen below
• Need to make the middle margins larger so text wont be lost in gutter
• State author of article/image
• Could include pull quote with image to make more interesting
• Use smaller text
• Margins need to be the same between columns

Draft cover/contents/double page spread

I created two double page spreads as the first was my initial one that I created from my flat plan but the second I created to test other styles and see whether it would look more professional/appropriate to my style. I have decided I would use the first initial one that I created however if given more time I would have changed the background colour to make it a more subtle colour so that it still fitted with the theme of my other pages but didn't stand out as unusual.

(second designed double page spread)

Creation of my draft double page spread

Creation of my draft contents

Creation of my draft cover